Critic #2: Solaymon Yousuf
Solayman indicated that the rectangular box does not fit the overall aesthetic of the graph. There is too much yellow and should change the color by using another color from the color model. Also, he indicated that with the line graph, it is not consistent with that of the visual language model because it did not have any diagonal lines. He likes that all of the numbers are inside the circle and that seems to be consistent with the circles and numbers in the inside.
Given your comments, I have removed the rectangular box and added just numbers to represent the years. Also, I have added line treatment from the visual language model and included onto the x scale. I have removed the line graph as it was not consistent with the visual language.
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Critic #3: Euinice
Says that the color model is consistent throughout the relationship model. She would suggest that I should include a different color on the yellow rectangular box because it displays too much yellow. She suggest to also remove the the circles and layout the numbers on the inside to make it more consistent to that of the visual layout.
Again, I have included a different approach to the rectangular box by just included line treatment and numbers, like how the visual language model was styled. I have removed the circles and places it with sideways numbers.
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Critic #1: Marco Punio
marco can see the relationship better with the revision draft. It looks much sleek in design, simple, and more visually appealing to the viewer. the lines in the first makes it more confusing and does not make sense. Marco suggests that I should add a title. Also, add y axis like ticks to represent the points.
Given your critique, I have removed the lines, as it posed confusion to what it was for. I have included a title, and also I included a scale for the y-axis for reference.
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Critic #2: Kidus Sendeke
The color model seems to be consistent. Compared to version one, it has numbers on top of it to portray the points. He also likes the timeframe scale from the rectangle. The typography seems to be consistent. Adding a header and also add labels for x and y scale to 'scale' the points.
Given your critique, I have included a header and also added a x and y label to inform the user what this numbers line is referring to. The header or title indicates what what this information represents.
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Critic #1: Wobin Chen
Says that instead of including circle, should put the numbers on the side to make it more consistent with the visual layout. Should also use a different color for the rectangular box. He says that the bar should not be included since the original model had no box, but black text. Likes that the color is consistent throughout.
Given your comments, I have put the numbers on the inside of the bar, and almost making it vertical to make it more consistent with the visual language model. I have also used a different way to portray the x scale.
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Critic #3: Andrew Tran
the overall color seems to be consistent with the color model. Andrew would suggest to have the numbers on top to match with the color model, instead of the visual language model. He likes the line treatment and the years without the background more and it makes it more sleek. Maybe change the word year because it looks weird with two colors and an underline.
I have the numbers match, or scaled correctly, instead of creating inconsistent bars that does not have any correlation with its size and points. I have removed the line treatment decoration in efforts to make my numbers graphic more consistent to that of my model. I have also removed one of the two solid colors for the year.
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Critique 1 Message & Emulation
This display shows the relationship displays for my infographic. This display basically displays the amount of points Kobe Bryant has averaged throughout his career per year. It shows how much Kobe scores on average compared to also the average player.
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How this element exploits the visual potential of relationships: In attempt to make create a consistent visual layout to my models, I have used the same bar graphs, circles, and also rectangles(horizontal bar) in effort to combine these visual content and display it into information.
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How this element emulates the models: I had used the same or similar font as the existing infographic in the Kevin Durant one. I used Myriad Pro, a similar looking font to use on the title. I have used all caps to indicate the importance of this section. Currently, all of the font-size are the same and will included different typefaces within future edits.
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Critique 2 Message & Emulation
This display shows the relationship displays for my infographic. This display basically displays the amount of points Kobe Bryant has averaged throughout his career per year. It shows how much Kobe scores on average compared to also the average player.
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How this element exploits the visual potential of relationships: In attempt to make create a consistent visual layout to my models, I have used the same bar graphs, circles, and also rectangles(horizontal bar) in effort to combine these visual content and display it into information. I have removed the rectangular bar to create a more consistent language. I have removed the line graph and instead with that line treatment, I have it labeling/guiding it to the points.
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How this element emulates the models: I had used the same or similar font as the existing info graphic in the Kevin Durant one. I used Myriad Pro, a similar looking font to use on the title. I have used all caps to indicate the importance of this section. Currently, all of the font-size are the same and will included different typefaces within future edits.
Relationship Elements & Critiques
Final Display Message & Emulation
Relationship as a form of visual potential uses connections between shapes on a page to represent connections between things or people in the real world and this can be visually exploited through shapes, symbols, lines, and diagrams. For my display, I have used symbols and shapes to represent the relationship Kobe have had with Shaq. Because of their dynamic duo and fued for each other, these two have won 3 consecutive NBA championship titles with each other.
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I have chosen symbols and shapes for this encoding is because I want to enforce that these two players side-by-side single handely carried their teams to victory 3 years in a row by showing an equation. Kobe + Shaq = 3 Trophies. I used the + symbol to combine these two players together and to show there is a direct connection to why the Lakers won in 2000,2001, and 2002 championships and the equals sign shows the result of it. This also is a form of visual language I have used alongside with my model.
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I have used the sames font to that on my typography model by using Halis Grotesque Font for the jersey names to indicate which player is which. I used the technique of fills and shapes to create the general outline of a jersey and to make it recognizable to views who might not know what this might be about. Also, in order to make my visual consistent with my model, I have used repetition of the trophies and the equation to represent this relationship. The color also seems to be consistent to that of my color however, the only different color I used was the inside of the jersey. If I had not used a different color other than the 2 primary colors I was allowed, it would not have looked great.
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